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Post by Amarië Fri Dec 27, 2013 11:56 am

I'm trying to finish a little story for a secret santa event on livejournal, and I need to be done on the 30th. We were given a promt, the likes/dislikes and favorite pairing of the secret person, and we won't know who we are writing for until we have delivered our story.

But I need someone to read through it and help me with spelling, language and overall consistency. And if you have an idea or two for improvement, that would be nice too. (I seem to be a bit stuck, or maybe a bit paralyzed in fear of disappointing the receiver. I am SO looking forward to read the story I'll get, and feel mine is too short and rushed and meh...)

It's Merlin fandom and slash fic (cuddling cute stuff, nothing graphic) but it's modern AU so you don't really have to know the characters at all. About 1000 words.

Would you help me be a good santa? 
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Post by Pettytyrant101 Fri Dec 27, 2013 12:00 pm

pm or email me it Amarie and I will give it a read through later today and give you my thoughts.

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Post by Amarië Fri Dec 27, 2013 12:19 pm

cheers  Kissing 

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Post by Pettytyrant101 Fri Dec 27, 2013 12:23 pm

Here to help as Odo might say.  Very Happy 

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Post by Norc Fri Dec 27, 2013 1:58 pm

i could look over spelling if you'd like and read through it too perhaps  Smile i am sort of in the Merlin fandom Wink
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Post by Amarië Fri Dec 27, 2013 2:21 pm

:carrot: A PM is heading your way pronto!

Not really a spoiler:

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Post by Mrs Figg Fri Dec 27, 2013 2:29 pm

I will look too if you like. But grammar and spelling is not my forte.
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Post by Amarië Fri Dec 27, 2013 2:32 pm

But you do know how to tell a story.  Kissing 

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Post by The Wobbit A Parody Fri Dec 27, 2013 2:32 pm

Let me know if you want another pair of eyes on it.
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Post by Norc Fri Dec 27, 2013 3:04 pm

Amarië wrote::carrot: A PM is heading your way pronto!

Not really a spoiler:
well i am drooling...
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Post by Bluebottle Fri Dec 27, 2013 3:34 pm

Again?  Laughing 

You seem to have more that enough expertise at hand already Amarië, so you probably don't need my help. But you shall of course have it if you need it.

From what I've read of your writing it'll probably turn out great. Nod

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Post by Amarië Fri Dec 27, 2013 6:44 pm

Oh you are too charming.

I think I have the help I need now. I knew I could rely on the Shire.  I love you 

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Post by Orwell Fri Dec 27, 2013 8:40 pm

If you needed a bit of sauce, I think I might know someone who could help...  Very Happy I also know someone who has a very extensive provacative vegetables and fruit collection...  Laughing 

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Post by Bluebottle Fri Dec 27, 2013 11:26 pm

Amarië wrote:Oh you are too charming.

What? Me?  Shocked 

Well, maybe a little bit.  Very Happy 

Still I did just use your joke at Petty over in the Freedom thread just like my character used it at Pettys character in your Bandersnatch story.  Laughing 

Will there be any more Bandersnatch writing by the way? I was quite enjoying that one.

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Post by Amarië Fri Dec 27, 2013 11:47 pm

I had to do this secret santa thing and another other story first, but there will be more of Bandersnatchers and Work-a-hobbit soon now, I hope. Smile

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Post by Norc Fri Dec 27, 2013 11:50 pm

Yey Cheerleader
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Post by Bluebottle Sat Dec 28, 2013 12:07 am

I'm glad someone else said that, as I might have come across as oh so girly.  Laughing 

But, yeah ... what Norc said. Nod

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Post by Amarië Fri Dec 26, 2014 8:24 pm

Amarië wrote:I'm trying to finish a little story for a secret santa event on livejournal, and I need to be done on the 30th. We were given a promt, the likes/dislikes and favorite pairing of the secret person, and we won't know who we are writing for until we have delivered our story.

But I need someone to read through it and help me with spelling, language and overall consistency. And if you have an idea or two for improvement, that would be nice too. (I seem to be a bit stuck, or maybe a bit paralyzed in fear of disappointing the receiver. I am SO looking forward to read the story I'll get, and feel mine is too short and rushed and meh...)

It's Merlin fandom and slash fic (cuddling cute stuff, nothing graphic) but it's modern AU so you don't really have to know the characters at all. About 1000 words.

Would you help me be a good santa? 
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It's that time of the year again and I should have had my story finished, beta read and sent yesterday.  :facepalm:
Can anyone offer an emergency read through of the mess I've made?

It's Merlin fandom, canon age, AU, pairing is Gwaine/Merlin (nothing explicit) and sort of Merlin/Morgana but not really. Plot may remind you of the episode "servant of two masters". And it kept growing, so it's approx. 4k words.

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Post by Pettytyrant101 Sat Dec 27, 2014 12:34 pm

I am not very up on Merlin fanfic Amarie- so not sure I can be of any help with detail or characters- but I can proof read it for you if thats any good?

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Post by Amarië Sat Dec 27, 2014 12:55 pm

Oh yes please! Kissing

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Post by Pettytyrant101 Sat Dec 27, 2014 12:58 pm

Bung it a pm and send it to me Amarie- or email me it- whichever.
I am about to go out for lunch but I will be able to take a look over it once I get home later this afternoon.

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Post by Mrs Figg Sat Dec 27, 2014 3:31 pm

sorry I am no use, my grammar is terrible. I split clauses. No
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Post by Amarië Sat Dec 27, 2014 5:47 pm

Explains why Santa can cover so many homes in such short time. Nod

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Post by Bluebottle Mon Dec 29, 2014 12:20 am

I'm probably to late to help out again, (for the second year running Embarassed ) but of course, if you still need it. Smile

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Post by Amarië Mon Dec 29, 2014 12:58 am

It's already delivered and the receiver sounded quite thrilled, but thank you anyway. Wink

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